Please review my site... puhleese

[dizzyd]

can i get a few comments on my site???

My website (http://www.thepawn.com/auctions)

Thanks

[linnetwoods]

I would have, but clicking on your link produced a "pop-up blocked" message. I don't critique sites with unsolicited pop-ups thrown at me before I have even had a chance to see what kind of a site it is, sorry! (Actually, you're probably better off without one of my critiques, they're hopeless!) :D

[dizzyd]

I think the pop-up is on your end because i never get one and I don't have any associated with my site... Would you be willing to give it a second chance...?

[linnetwoods]

Sure! Going to now!

[linnetwoods]

I have been clicking on the link that says My Website and that is definitely giving out the pop-up message. Will try the other one... That one does it too. Actually, it seems the pop-up is on the forum! When I decided to give it the benefit of the doubt it only opened your page in a new window. Strange, it hasn't done that with any of the other links I have clicked on in here! I will go and look at your site now. Back soon!

OK:

1) I quite like your logo, although I am not a great fan of moving images on a page where you want people to read the text.

2) Don't like the acreage of empty space on the right. If you make the width a percentage of the available monitor space as opposed to a fixed width you will get the page to fit whatever screen it goes onto.

I am looking at your site on a 19" monitor and it doesn't look good all over to the left like that. If you want to stick to a fixed width, I would recommend you put some kind of decorative border down the right hand side so that it still looks good on larger screens.

3) To atract the customers you want, you need the right look Being able to spell helps, too:D That should be attract with two 't's.

4)No one wants a big corporation charging an arm and a leg for something a son can do for his family. Let us help you and your family. Whether were helping organize your photos, restoring grandmas photo when she was a little girl, converting your daughters dance recital VHS to DVD so it will still be there to share with her children, or streaming you video photo album over the internet so family who lives too far away can share the same memories. We’re not multi-million dollar executives trying to buy a third house at your expense, we just want to share the joy that everyone is experiencing with every product we've sold today. So go through the hope chest, get in that old attic, go through your dresser, and change someone’s life today.

I would break that up a bit - it looks a bit like you are babbling without pausing for breath! I would do it like this:

No one wants a big corporation charging an arm and a leg for something a son can do for his family. Let us help you and your family.

We can help organize your photos or restore grandma's photo of herself as a little girl (unless you meant 'your photo of grandma as a little girl'). We can convert your daughter's dance recital from VHS to DVD so it will still be there to share with her own children someday or stream your family video photo album over the Internet so family who live far away can share the same memories.

We’re not multi-million dollar executives trying to buy a third house at your expense, we just want to share the joy that everyone is experiencing with every product we've sold today. So go through the hope chest, get in that old attic, go through your dresser, and change someone’s life today!

5) VIDEO PRODUCTION would look and sound more professional than VIDEO PRODUCING

OK, that's enough from me - let someone else have a dig at it! It is basically a good page, or I wouldn't have bothered to spend so much time on it. Sorry if you've had to wait around! Cheers!

Oops! I have just noticed that 'today' is repeated in that last sentence. Might want to drop one...

[dizzyd]

LOL... oops... You looked at the wrong site... You clicked on the "DizzyDProductions" link instead of the "My website" link... The DizzyDProductions think was done a long time ago... Thanks for the review though... Sorry about the confusion... I was just trying to get the other site reviewed

http://www.thepawn.com/auctions

[linnetwoods]

OK! Going there now...

1) Same again about the moving image stopping a viewer wanting to read the text - I found it very hard to concentrate my vision. I would get it to stop after three or four seconds.

2) I'm not madly keen on the use of violet with those greens... I think I would go for another shade of green or one of blue, or even a yellow but not the wild contrast.

3) The boxes on the left are all different widths - it looks very messy. I would make all of them the same width as the widest one.

4) You have bags of white space at the end of the page centre - you don't need all that width; why not move the product categories over to the right or use a different way of displaying them so they don't creep so far down the page?

5) Now you have gone from being a bit too long winded to saying nothing much at all! The site is too impersonal and too much like a zillion other sites, frankly. Sorry, but I liked the other one much better!

[intelboy15]

Looks like a nice site.

Although refering to linnet's earlier comment, I don't quite like the acreage of white space.

The flashy ad above the the "1999" product also deters my focus away from your site and gets me into a dizzy fixed state of impulsiveness (spellbound :D).

The gray background for each of the categories off to the side, you might want to even those out so they are uniform (cosmetics).

The text "Welcome Guest, Please LOGIN to your account or SIGNUP with us to Sell/Buy products" right below the upper navigation menu, I suggest making the text there black instead of white. It makes it easier to read on the eyes, because right now I'm squinting a little to read the text.

Everything else seems to be in order. Good Hunting! :D